In prickled night of starry widow's lace
an empty face,
eyes candle bright, body of shadow coat
awaits for throat,
so tender white and free from loving kiss
and nightly bliss.
And she of lemon soap and gentle frown
in bridal gown
dance cherry blossom free with steps of spring
that hope does bring.
Outside, the darkness sings a lullaby
for eyes to die
in slumber lily pure until a bite
cast out sunlight.
and now the blood of men awakes her shroud -
if he's endowed.
Dear reader, mock you this tale of night's fear
with righteous sneer
and one dark night your tearful friends will tell,
He did not yell

Ohhhh. Love. Especially:
ReplyDelete"And you of lemon soap and gentle frown
in bridal gown"
Thanks. I liked that as well!
Deleteha nice to hear and see you read this john...esp. loved ...And you of lemon soap and gentle frown
ReplyDeletein bridal gown dance cherry blossom free...great contrast to the second part of the poem with the smell of blood..
Yes, it came from playing with images
DeletePitch perfect tale of woe. The video is a real treat with so much depth gained through tone and expression. My vampire poem: http://chromapoesy.com/2012/04/28/soul-to-tinder/
ReplyDeleteYes, I increasingly wonder at poetry only for reading
Deletesmiles....very nice....i really like the lemon soap and gentle frown line it makes for a nice contrast for what is to come....the cherry blossom makes a nice image as well and transition to the ripped bodice....
ReplyDeleteAlways surprises me to see what emerges
DeleteThe rhymed couplets of uneven line length lend themselves well to mesmerizing the reader, as they run through your retel
ReplyDeleteIng of the mythos.
Thanks I like playing with form
DeleteLiked the rhyme, hypnotic effect of the reading, and of course, cherry blossoms (now that's unusual in a vampire tale :P)
ReplyDeleteGot to slip in counter-genre surprises!
DeleteNice to hear your poem...shivers...rich imagery..I am keeping my eyes opened ~
ReplyDeleteYes, I tend to 'perform' my poems when I write so they have to be heard!
DeleteI love the last line. It finishes it off well :)
ReplyDeleteYes they are behind you!
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